TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Monday 16th February 2009 3:47pm for Chapter 5 — Bewitched

Very good chapter, love it when Harry has fun.

gunny

Lady Alchymia replied:

I like him having fun too :).

Thanks very much,

Lady A

noylj posted a comment on Saturday 14th February 2009 10:54pm for Chapter 5 — Bewitched

Rather see Harry's version of Fleur. Does he do full body or just head/bust poses? Seems like his subconscious could get him into trouble or some real pleasure...
Attack of the underwear. What a perfect way to keep all men out of the area.
The best looking bra I ever saw was laying on the floor...

Lady Alchymia replied:

Harry was doing head shots.   Fleur didn't stay over, so Harry didn't need to do a drawing of her.   Harry's subconscious, and  tapping into it through Charmed Charcoals,  is something to watch for, but he can only draw what his mind can imagine.

Regards,

Lady Alchymia

brad posted a comment on Wednesday 11th June 2008 6:04pm for Chapter 5 — Bewitched

Ah. From the first paragraph with Hermione shouting instructions from a 'charmed megaphone' - in between chapters, mind you - I felt that the story had changed gears. All that sombre stuff left behind, here's the nice lightweight teenage fun and games that you do so well, with the deft touch and whimsy that makes your storytelling so unique in my mind.

You know, I think I might have started reading version 1 of the Emerald Tablet back before I evolved into the higher fandom lifeform (i.e. H/Hr fan) that I am today :-). I don't recall you having the bits of - oh dear - R/Hr that I read in this and the next few chapters. Hermione's possibility jealousy of Ron's attraction to Fleur. Ron with Viktor (although the latter is straight from canon). Ron's feelings towards Hermione, fine, that makes his dalliances with both her and the blonde beater later on in Psychomania all the more duplicitous, but I didn't recall any Hr -> Ron hints. Nuts.

Loved Susan's noticing Harry's "I will not tell lies" scar; good attention to canon detail, that.

Harry being trapped by stands of womens lingerie that require a 'firm' hand, heh; great fun.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Hi Brad,

Thank you for your lovely compliments :).   I think I've evolved, too; though I'm not always sure if that's a good thing -- I often feel like it would be better to not know some things sometimes.

The Hermione / Ron / Viktor bits you mention were always there, but you've possibly developed a more finely tuned radar :).

Thanks on the "I will not tell lies" bit :).   I do like making connections to canon whenever I can.

Glad you enjoyed the cringeworthy shopping trip :D.

Cheers,

Lady A

Jenifer Winterbine posted a comment on Monday 3rd December 2007 11:36pm for Chapter 5 — Bewitched

Interesting chapter! Your dialogue sounds real and I liked the introduction of new characters.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Thanks, Jenifer!   I love writing dialogue.   Too much, of course -- there are many sections where I should be cutting it back, but it is good fun to write.

New characters can be hard for people to enjoy, so thank you very much!

Kindly,

Lady A

Jenifer Winterbine posted a comment on Monday 3rd December 2007 11:13pm for Chapter 5 — Bewitched

Please someone remind me; what is the connection between Remus and all the orchids? Obviously I have missed something earlier on or in cannon - or probably my old brain has read it then promptly forgotten it as it is alarmingly prone to do of late.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Ah ... Remus and the orchids ...

As for the canon references to Remus and orchids (or gardening).   No, lol, nothing special there, I'm afraid.   I just like to think that a side-benefit of being a werewolf would be a good sense of smell (Remus mentions when Bill is maimed in HBP that werewolves do have 'wolfish tendencies' even outside moon time).   So, I thought gardening might be a nice pastime for a peace-loving werewolf, drinking tea and smelling the flowers.

For my story (and partly canon) Remus isn't allowed to hold down very many jobs (due to Ministry regulations against employing werewolves).   For my story, he  is allowed to grow and sell flowers, though the Ministry taxes him to death for the privilege, ensuring that he makes only a meagre profit.   Still, it is something, and he is fiercely prideful about taking money from his friends, so it's a way of him getting some degree of income.   Sirius had given him a bathroom to use as a kind of hothouse for growing his delicate orchids, and when Harry moved in to #12, he noticed the flowers for the first time when Remus was giving him a tour of the house.   When the Black House Blitz happened, Harry had three things he particularly wanted:

1/ To set up a proper conservatory for Remus on the roof, where he could grow more and better flowers.

2/ Move the kitchen from the basement to the first floor (he hated the basement -- too many bad memories).

3/ Getting rid of the mounted house-elf heads.

He also mentioned that a  private bathroom would be nice, but he didn't insist on it.   Hestia Jones was really excited to do something for him, so she was the one who made it so elaborate.   Harry would have been happy with something simple and functional, but she created this really beautiful, complicated, luxury bathroom.

Cheers,

Lady A

wana10 posted a comment on Wednesday 24th October 2007 3:44pm for Chapter 5 — Bewitched

as i started reading through this i was hit with the strongest feeling of deja vu, as though i had read this story before. then i realized this was titles v2 and i had read it before. was bummed to not get to the birthday scene, the frank sinatra singing snake (i believe he was named frank as well?) was a great character. i do remember in v1 harry starts a relationship with another character before <spoiler removed> ...hopefully this time around he comes to his senses more quickly! can't wait for more.
-wana10

Lady Alchymia replied:

Hi there,

Potterfest is not at risk lol.   I hope you enjoy the rest!

Thanks,

Lady A

hga posted a comment on Friday 12th October 2007 2:57pm for Chapter 5 &mdash; Bewitched

CONSTANT VIGILANCE!

(^_^ Had to say that, but the Lady and I discussed this and I agreed that that aspect of V1 was OK.)

I had to force myself through the previous chapters simply because I wasn't right now in the mood for post-OotP angst, but I knew the payoff would be worth it, and I was right.

And while the memory of V1 is a bit distant, I can see lots of places where V2 has substantially improved upon it. It's also very encouraging to see an author dedicated enough to the art that she does a serious edit on an older work in addition to improving with entirely new writing. I suspect there's a lot to be gained by doing at least one serious edit effort, and I'm particularly pleased to see a very good story become excellent.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Hi there, Harold :),

They're lovely sentiments, thank you.   The only reason I started posting on the Internet  was in an effort to write better, and however vexing my preoccupation with practicing on first draft material, it really did work.   I'm still firmly in the novice-writer category, but  my writing, now, is so much better than when I started.   Bit of a catch-22, really.    I'm now at the point where I can write fairly decent original stories--I  might even try to publish something someday--but I would never have got there without hundreds of people letting me know, in excruciating detail,  how crap I was.   Thanks for being one of them :).

Lady A

beauty01021 posted a comment on Thursday 11th October 2007 2:12pm for Chapter 5 &mdash; Bewitched

yeah great chapter can't wait for more so please update again and soon.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Thank you.

fountaam posted a comment on Friday 5th October 2007 11:05pm for Chapter 5 &mdash; Bewitched

:)

For a minute there I thought PotterFest was going to disappear.

I think I'm enjoying this story more, because I'm hunting for the changes.

:)

Lady Alchymia replied:

Hi there,

Potterfest is safe LoL.   I'm really pleased you're still enjoying the story; thank you very much!

Lady A

Meg posted a comment on Friday 5th October 2007 7:18pm for Chapter 5 &mdash; Bewitched

You had me giggling through out most of this chapter. :)

I'm really enjoying this all over again! From what I vaguely remember from V1, it's flowing a lot better from scene to scene. Rather than feeling the need to take a break between sections, you're sucking me into what's going on, making it very vivid. I could really feel those panty racks closing in on me! LOL

Thanks much for the latest chapter. I'm looking forward to the next.

Meg

Lady Alchymia replied:

Hi Meg,

Thank you very much!   I appreciate your comments.   I've grown quite fascinated with editing for flow in the last year.   I'm slowly getting the hang of it, and I've certainly got plenty of text to practice on :P.  

I'm glad the scene felt vivid, though I should probably apologise for feeling happy that you felt the  racks chasing you LoL.

Cheers!

Lady A

applesollie posted a comment on Friday 5th October 2007 5:32pm for Chapter 5 &mdash; Bewitched

Lovely as always my Lady.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Thank you very much :)

Lady A

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Friday 5th October 2007 4:46pm for Chapter 5 &mdash; Bewitched

Great chapter! Totally loved the way you worked Susan in sooner than before. Hopefully we will be spared the hormonally charged non relationship that <spoiler removed>... I mean, how shallow can you get? But of course Harry is a teenaged boy and there are wild oats and all that. Hope to see him and susan get together.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Thank you :).   I'm glad you liked the changes.   As for teenage boys ... I don't know about oats LoL, but, yes,  hormones will be hormones.

Cheers!

Lady A

PadyandMoony posted a comment on Friday 5th October 2007 7:09am for Chapter 5 &mdash; Bewitched

Great chapter! I liked the changes though with this changes in <spoiler removed> I can't see him and <spolier removed> getting together.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Thank you kindly :).   I wouldn't underesimate Harry's ability to not see what's whacking him in the head :P.

Lady A