Content Harry Potter

Awakenings
Chapter 6 — A Fly in the Ointment

By Lady Alchymia

Reviews

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Tuesday 17th February 2009 6:30am for Chapter 6 — A Fly in the Ointment

Very good chapter.

gunny

Lady Alchymia replied:

Thanks kindly :)

Lady A

noylj posted a comment on Saturday 14th February 2009 11:19pm for Chapter 6 — A Fly in the Ointment

Oh no, this isn't the story where we have to put up with <spoiler removed>. i hope that isn't this story, but that fish on the shower wall is too much...
It was a great story, as far as I got, I just get really tired really fast of Angst!Harry and <spoiler removed> Oops, just an innocent mistake, could happen to any greasy git who hates Harry and enjoys pushing him down stairs.
I see Snape hasn't paid for that little episode yet, either.
Your stories are still much better than those lame excuses JKR came out with.

Lady Alchymia replied:

I'm afraid it is that story.   Best to escape now.

Regards,

Lady Alchymia

brad posted a comment on Wednesday 11th June 2008 6:11pm for Chapter 6 &mdash; A Fly in the Ointment

I think your description of the shop - George swimming an impromptu backstroke through pink bubbles - is easily a notch above Rowling's own attempt in HBP. It's a great imagination you have that makes this a delight to read - charmed charcoal, bubbles, Frank, mosaic fish and Bruce, of course.

Ah, the phone calls explained! I was wondering about that early on but had forgotten the mystery.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Hi Brad,

Aw, you're so sweet.   Many thanks!   The twins' shop was great fun to explore -- who but them could have found Bruce?   The charcoals have been particularly useful, of course, and it would be a lot less fun without Frank, I think.

And  the phone calls!   Yes, they provided a very different entry to the story than  version 1.   The piano was huge in improving Harry's state of mind in the first version, and so by the time Remus came to get him, Harry was emotionally ready to move on.   Without that distraction (yes, evil me) he only sank deeper into himself.   The V2 progression through the first few chapters, the first full moon conflict  and so on, let matters come to a head before they started improving, so I feel like we all earned some fun bits :).

Thanks kindly,

Lady A

a_wanderer posted a comment on Thursday 29th November 2007 12:20pm for Chapter 6 &mdash; A Fly in the Ointment

No more story? I must go back to work?

Aside from a few quibbles about matching word choices to characters, so minor I no longer remember them, I like this story very much.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Thanks!   I'm glad you like the story.   I'd be very happy to hear of particular words that sound off -- it all helps.

Cheers,

Lady A

applesollie posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 9:48pm for Chapter 6 &mdash; A Fly in the Ointment

Its good. As always my Lady.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Thanks very much!

Lady A

beauty01021 posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 12:12pm for Chapter 6 &mdash; A Fly in the Ointment

yeah great chapter can't wait for more so please update agian and soon.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Thanks kindly!

Lady A

Memory King posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 11:32am for Chapter 6 &mdash; A Fly in the Ointment

"Excellent work" doesn't quite cut it for this story, but I'm feeling lazy at the moment. Fantastic chapter, looking forward to more!

Lady Alchymia replied:

Thanks, Trevor!   I'm glad you're enjoying the story :)

Lady A

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 10:09am for Chapter 6 &mdash; A Fly in the Ointment

Great to see this again, and looking forward to the party, and what happens afterwards with Harry, as well as the way that Elizabeth gets there.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Excellent!   Thanks very much :)

Lady A

morriganscrow posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 9:30am for Chapter 6 &mdash; A Fly in the Ointment

Lovely!
Bruce the Blowie was perfect, as was the rest of the chapter.
I particularly liked Harry being attracted to a number of girls, rather than his One Twu Wuv at such an improbable age.
Keep up the fine job.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Many thanks for your compliments :).

Bruce the Blowie is great fun to write, and you'll be seeing more of him in some upcoming chapters!

As for Harry being attracted to a number of girls -- rather than one true love -- absolutely!   I think more than anything it's the idea of love that is so seductive at 16.   It solves all problems, it heals all wounds, it validates you as a sexual being, it makes the world shine, yada yada yada.   It's all very real in the moment, but so easily dissolves into nothingness again.   Quite the rollercoaster.   In the next chapter, we'll be seeing Harry get on board for a most destructive ride :).

Hope you enjoy it!

Lady A

PadyandMoony posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 5:11am for Chapter 6 &mdash; A Fly in the Ointment

I really liked the changes. Especially the whole comparing Elizabeth to Remus thing. It's nice to see Harry understanding she was part of the group before he met her.

Lady Alchymia replied:

Thanks kindly!   The way Elizabeth enters the story is feeling a lot more satisfying to me, too.   I love messing with characters' heads -- playing things out with each knowing different things and thinking (incorrcetly) that they understand what's going on.

Cheers!

Lady A